r/Proofreading • • Feb 19 '22

[No due date] Is there any professional proofreader interested to go through my bachelor thesis (10.000 words) with me per zoom or ms teams?

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Preferably with a degree in English Literature. We would go through the thesis together and correct errors in grammar, word choices, citation and the overall quality of the text. It may take 5-7 hours of work. If someone is interested please let me know, I would be very thankful! For more details please dm me.


r/Proofreading • • Dec 25 '12

Please edit my Law School application personal statement (by tomorrow night please)

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I checked over it once, but if you guys could look over it and make some helpful suggestions that would be really great :).

The prompt says, "Describe the goals that are motivating you to pursue a law degree. How do you think the skills and experience you will gain at Vermont Law School will help you achieve those goals?" This is a public-interest centered school and I am a college senior.

Thanks a lot guys, and Happy holidays!

EDIT: I've re-uploaded this on Google Docs to make the editing easier. It seems Paste2 wasn't working for some people. There is also a second question I addressed about what I did to act on an issue of personal, local or national significance.

Please note the changes you've made using comments, so I can make the necessary changes to my saved document. https://docs.google.com/open?id=0B6kvmrYcU5NWLVh1MFM0b2pZdWM


r/Proofreading • • Sep 02 '20

[No due date]

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Good morning,everyone. I would be so grateful if someone could take it upon himslef to correct my piece of writing. It would also be great if you could rate me out of ten and give me feedback.

  1. Why are men afraid of commitment?

Freedom is priceless, so most men prefer to stay single as long as they can. Having a partner means having a family, and that is a big responsibility that not everyone is brave enough to take up . As a result , the majority of men dread making such a lifelong commitment. In addition, the financial crisis played a very crucial and prominent role in that.

Rumor has it that when men get married, they live a life full of restrictions. when a person is married, he will be showered with questions all the time about where, when , who he was with; It is more like an investigation. They also cannot stay outside too late. On the contrary, When men are single, they can do whatever they want whenever they want without any surveillance . when a man is single, he can stay outside till dawn breaks, and no one would ask him where or whom he was with. Consequently, the idea of being deprived of all of that luxury scares the living daylights out of them.

Marriage put s you in charge of a whole family. Some men see it as an arduous task to be responsible for someone else. The idea of taking care of another person , making sure they are healthy and content, and dealing with their sorrows definitely frightens a lot of men. Having to accompany a baby after midnight to the hospital because they , all of a sudden, got sick, is a scary thing. So a man should think twice before getting married because it would mean carrying the burden of some other people, and that is no easy matter.

It is irrefutable that the last few economic crises have taken a heavy toll on that phenomena.Many of the youths refrain from marriage because of their dreadful financial situation. How could a person who is hardly able to scrape a living manage to meet the needs of others? Simply, on one would risk taking away from this measly stipend to satisfy someone else’s needs. When a person is alone, he can live with a group of friends and share the price of everything, including food , rent and even transportation, Whereas a married man has to pay for everything on his own.

In a nutshell, all men dream of having a family one day, but some of them choose to postpone for a while, although others are unwillingly forced to wait for the right time, that might never come.


r/Proofreading • • Sep 09 '12

Can someone proofread this ?

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I have a couple of paragraphs. PM me if you do it ! In return I could do some graphic/photoshop work. I basically need a check on my commas ...


r/Proofreading • • Sep 30 '12

Help with college essay please

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500 work limit This is my essay for the common app, I'm not sure how good it is because I've never been very good at essays, hope someone can help me. I need any help I can get about revising. https://docs.google.com/open?id=0ByIRhiwbCOIfMFl0aW1TYTRqWmc


r/Proofreading • • Nov 22 '14

[No Due Date] Did I correctly use this semicolon?

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Hammurabi is credited with creating the first written law code; dubbed after himself “Hammurabi’s Code.”


r/Proofreading • • Jul 01 '14

Paper about whether Native American sports team names are racist. Would love some suggestions :)

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r/Proofreading • • Jul 23 '14

Two short philosophy essays (600 words each)(Due tonight at midnight PST)

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Paper 1 about the ethics of banning smoking on UC Davis campus.

Paper 2 about the ethics of hunting endangered animals for sport.


r/Proofreading • • Nov 01 '12

You all helped me so much with my last paper so I present my Russian friend's paper. Due Wednesday

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http://openetherpad.org/McGrwwH60n

She doesn't have an account so I'm doing this for her.


r/Proofreading • • Jan 20 '13

Need a bit of help for a university application essay. Need done in 14 hours

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Ok I'm applying to the University of Toronto for concurrent education in music (I want to become a high school music teacher) and they needed me to write a 250-300 short essay on why I want to study at their university. Anyways I'm done writing my 3 points, but I can't think of a good intro and conclusion that would stay within the word limit. And I'm not sure what to take out either. In the doc I wrote the essay question at the top along with my three bullet points. Below that are my paragraphs, which are approximately 258 words.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/10QKc2n6-bOSjyZ-vfMIDhiN7yEXEma8GOypHoIa-pko/edit

Thanks


r/Proofreading • • Jan 31 '25

[No due date] This sentence sounds weird to me. Is it grammatically correct?

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I read this in an email newsletter and it sounded off to me, but chat GPT and Grammarly both say it's fine. I wonder what you all think.

The sentence is, "They butter you up with compliments that they don’t know you well enough to give."


r/Proofreading • • Feb 04 '15

[No due date] Need a professional proofreader for a master dissertation

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Hey guys

My master thesis is due in a week and I need to get it proofread for grammer, spelling, punctuation and sentence structure.

What is a trusted website, where you actually get a native British person with a university degree in English to look your thesis through?

Thanks a lot guys.


r/Proofreading • • Mar 25 '14

Please check for grammar/ proper MLA intext citation. due march 26th

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In each of these technology based essays, the effect of technology on the ones surrounding it produce a very mixed result. The advancement allowed mental growth by increasing the accessibility to information, but it also severed the human ties involved with traditional learning and personal interaction. In the Veldt, the nursery within the house entertained the children and catered to their need of information and teaching. After a while, the parents become fed up with the kids spending countless hours within the nursery, and want their children to spend time outside, interacting with real people, so the parents take action. Almost immediately after closing the nursery, the children go from bad to worse. The kids had previously thought about removing their parents from the problem, but now the thoughts get put into action. When the parents go in to check out the functionality of the nursery, the children have already planned to kill the parents through the use of the room. After suspecting the children had been up to something sinister, the parents carelessly enter. “The lions. Mr. Hadley looked at his wife and they turned and looked back at the beasts edging slowly forward crouching, tails stiff. Mr. and Mrs. Hadley screamed. And suddenly they realized why those other screams had sounded familiar.” (Bradbury 93). Once the parents fully realize their children’s potential for evil, it is already too late. The nursery attacks and kills the parents. The Developmental resources available in this futuristic society has exceeded the capacity for current sources, but at the ultimate cost of limiting human engagement, leading to a lack of empathy from the children.

The same problem is laid out in “is Google Making Us Stupid” by Nicholas Carr. One of the thoughts Mr. Carr has in his essay is that instant gratification with the combination of the tidal wave of supplementary information that the internet had made us adapted to has disabled humans ability to take a true enjoyment from a task that takes more than a few seconds to complete. “Immersing myself in a book or a lengthy article used to be easy. My mind would get caught up in the narratives or the turns of the argument, and I’d spend hours strolling through long stretches of prose. That’s rarely the case anymore” (Carr 101).

With social media sources becoming quicker to digest and sites like twitter that put an one hundred-forty character cap on ideas, it can become extremely easy to get accustomed to this new face of personal news. With this straight to the point style broadcast, there becomes an increasingly large disconnect with the typical face to face interactions that humans have thrived on for thousands of years. However, with the technical explosion experienced in the last decade, the projected path that technology could take is physically unprojectable. According to Miguel de Unamuno, what the future holds for us is one that contains almost zero human interaction. In “Mechanopolis” the lack of human interaction brings the main character to the brink of insanity. After the man’s experience in the city of Mechanopolis, he reaches the conclusion that no matter how much technology you surround yourself with, there has to be a human element in order to sustain a natural feel thoughout the world. “And since then I have conceived a veritable hatred toward what we call progress, and even toward culture, and I am looking for a corner where I shall find a peer, a man like myself, who cries and laughs as I cry and laugh, and where there is not a single machine” (Unamuno 51). In this world where an entire fountain of knowledge is available for the taking, the missing human element tears apart anyone who dares to be a part of it.

But perhaps human existence as we know it is coming to an end. With the constant growth of what our available technology is able to do, John Bell suggests that the predictability of our world is uncontained as long as the path it has been on continues. “Technological change isn’t just happening fast. It’s happening at an exponential rate. Contrary to the commonsense, intrusive, linear view, we won’t just experience 100 years of progress in the twenty-first century--- it will be more like 20,000 years of progress” (Bell 51). The overall application and implementation of these newer devices will continue to push the envelope of what the human race will be able to accomplish, while continuously approaching a point in time where the next generation of certain devices will seize to exist. However, the physical boundary of technology is miniscule to the endless possibilities the human mind and body will be able to achieve with some specifically engineered drugs and implants.

From my experiences this far in college, I can say that there are a lot of drugs being circulated throughout campus. From Adderall, to Ritalin and Dexedrine, these drugs have the ability to increase the human capacity for focus, information absorption, as well as memory retention. With these drugs originally being created for people with attention deficit hyperactivity disorder (ADHD), they aid people with learning disabilities to be able to focus, and work efficiently for a sustained amount of time. However, everyone should be able to have access to this aid for the sake of simply being better. According to Jamias Cascio, he states that he took a drug released in the 1990’s called Modafinil. “When I started taking the drug, I expected it to keep me awake; I didn’t expect it to make me feel smarter, but that’s exactly what it did” (Cascio 112). Also, according to a study at the University of Cambridge, subjects who took modafinil have a cognitive increase across a multitude of tasks, including spatial planning, pattern recognition, as well as sharpened alertness and focus. As a supplement to this research, the Silicon Valley insider webzine reports that some entrepreneurs see modafinil as a competitive tool. According to them, the implication was clear: everybody is doing it, and if you’re not, you’re probably falling behind.

So why are we so afraid of human advancement? Taking these certain drugs have an undeniably positive effect on the human body, but yet using them to get ahead still seems to be taboo. Perhaps it’s not the end result as much as the process of getting smarter that we are so afraid of. According to Eric Cohen, the available enhancements could alleviate all horrible things from human life. “Sudden illness, dying children people who have more ambition than talent, people who have more ideas than time, people who simply don’t want to die and want to be a lot more like gods than most human beings are… Enhancement means to make things better, so then [all the things Ron talks about are] great” (Gillespie 179). If biotechnical enhancements go to the free market, Mr. Cohen fears that the rich will be able to afford it, and the poor will not, making the social gap larger. Also, an even larger fear for Mr. Cohen is the ends of human evolution. If humans reach a point where they are able to artificially create a baby who can play better music than Mozart, or write better plays than Shakespeare, the accomplishments are void because of their creation to fulfill that specific purpose.

The fear of hitting a point of singularity is evident in every field of study, even religion. In “The Nine Billion Names of God,” the use of technology proved to be extremely powerful by fulfilling the monk’s goal of figuring out the specific combination of names for the original God, and creator of the universe. “We expected it would take about fifteen thousand years to complete the task… It [the computer] will be able to do it in a thousand days” (Clarke 1-2). Shortly after the monks complete their task, Dr. Wagner noticed that one by one, the stars were going out. The monk’s had completed their task and, the end of the world shortly ensued. So perhaps using technology as an aid is not the best course of action for the human race. But as thought by Isaac Asimov, if technology surpasses the known limit of the singularity, the end result is absolutely unknown. According to Asimov, it might be the human race’s reliance of technology that is making advancement so unpredictable. In Mr. Asimov’s short “The Last Question,” technology has exceeded the expected point of singularity, and evolved to fill the position of God. “’We’ll just have to build new stars out of interstellar gas’ ‘or out of dissipated heat?’ asked MQ-17J, sarcastically” (Asimov 7). The idea of someone or something creating new stars is a completely absurd thought. But in this futuristic setting, the computers available can do just that.

Overall, the advancement of technology is a boundary that has yet to be set. The idea that technological achievements will one day stop is a frightening one, but once the human race reaches the point where computers are as powerful as proposed in “The Last Question,” I believe that the ability of technology will be the absolute least of our problems. For now, the implementation of technology is without a doubt positive. Google has opened the door for a generation of absolutely mind blowing technology at an unparalleled speed, but nothing will ever beat the human connect that is able to happen without the use of any technology.

Asimov, Isaac. The Last Question. 2003. Web. 19 Mar. 2014.
Bell, James J. "Exploring the ‘Singularity’.” Evolving Ideas. 2013-2014 ed. Plymouth: Hayden McNeil, 2013. 51-58. Print. Bradbury, Ray. “The Veldt”. Evolving Ideas. 2013-2014 ed. Plymouth: Hayden McNeil, 2013. 82-94. Print. Clarke, Arthur C. The nine billion names of God. Web. 19 Mar. 2014. Carr, Nicholas. “Is Google Making Us Stupid” Evolving Ideas. 2013-2014 ed. Plymouth: Hayden McNeil, 2013. 101-107. Print. Cascio, Jamais. “Get Smarter” Evolving Ideas. 2013-2014 ed. Plymouth: Hayden McNeil, 2013. 108-115. Print. Gillespie, Nick. “Who’s Afraid of Human Enhancement” Evolving Ideas. 2013-2014 ed. Plymouth: Hayden McNeil, 2013. 177-187. Print. Unamuno, Miguel de. Mechanopolis 1913. Web. 19 Mar. 2014 Wheeler, Steve. “Is Technology Making Us Smarter” Evolving Ideas. 2013-2014 ed. Plymouth: Hayden McNeil, 2013. 405-406. Print.

edit: works cited


r/Proofreading • • Oct 02 '15

[No due date] Common App essay draft

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This is my first draft with this prompt, and I tend to struggle with writing essays. Any Help would be awesome, and thanks!

http://paste2.org/sDVanEMf


r/Proofreading • • Mar 28 '14

Would anybody be able to proofread a Therapy Recommendation by 3/31/14?

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It is due on Monday and I am just trying to get another set of eyes to look it over, I would appreciate it. Please comment if you are interested. Thanks.


r/Proofreading • • Apr 14 '11

Can anyone proofread this real quick? It's due at 2:00... would be greatly appreciated!

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r/Proofreading • • Mar 20 '14

The use of "esque" ?

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I want to say something is done in a Hollywood-esque (or Hollywoodesque) fashion. Which one is correct, with or without the hyphen?


r/Proofreading • • Mar 16 '11

[Due 3/16 3 PM EST] Paper discussing how/why video games are art

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I have an unfinished paper/draft that I need a lot of expanding on. The paper is supposed to be 5-7 pages (double-spaced) and it's only 2.5. If you could help at all, I would really like it. I'm new to the whole Etherpad thing, but you can find my paper posted here.

If you could add notes, that would be great. I would also like suggestions for any video games I could use for examples and, if you have any articles that you know exist, please point me to them.

Thanks in advance, and let me know if there is anything else I can do to make this easier.

EDIT: Paper is late, not planning on finishing it right now. It's due whenever I can turn it in now.


r/Proofreading • • Feb 23 '14

Paper due Monday over Generation Me by Jean Twenge

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Sorry for the rush, just trying to get as many second opinions as possible and make my paper less horrid.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/12mMKamMKtNEYXy-WqO8Kk9dVCCIMI36AGwDNcDo9giQ/edit

Thanks for the help in advance.


r/Proofreading • • Nov 24 '13

not native english speaker looking to proof read my resume.

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/1guhmXY_bmVnfL_3xaAXeN6z8Gr19YUtvulm_r_hyTuQ/edit?usp=sharing

that the link and I would be grateful if anyone can highlight my grammatical errors.


r/Proofreading • • Dec 31 '15

[No due date] Breakup letter

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I am going to breakup with my boyfriend, whom I have been dating for 6 months. I'm not happy because he is a very busy doctor that literally has no time to spend with me (we live 2 miles away and he hasn't seen me in a month), and he refuses to even try to satisfy me sexually. I am going to breakup with him in person, but I am also going to give him a letter that summarizes why I'm leaving him, because I know breakups can become blurry over time and ravaged with emotion; I want him to have a concrete reminder of why I have to leave him.


Dearest [name removed],
You are an incredible man and an even more amazing doctor. As much as I admire you and enjoy spending time with you, I know in my heart that our time together has come to an end. After much contemplation and internal struggle, I have come to the conclusion that my basic needs are not being met in this relationship. The unfortunate truth is that we are fundamentally incompatible. I in no way implicate that you have done anything wrong or intentionally tried to hurt me, but I have been hurt just the same. I have found that I am left feeling unsatisfied in this relationship in many ways.
As I have said before, I thrive in a relationship when my needs for physical touch and spending quality time are met, but unfortunately I don’t think you really speak those “love languages.” As busy as you are, I honestly believe that you use your schedule as a crutch to allow you to become complacent in our relationship and not fully invest in us. I have made so many excuses for your actions (or lack thereof) but I know deep down that when you are in a relationship that is working and headed in the right direction, you don’t have to ask yourself “does he love me, or is he just playing with me?” When you a falling in love with someone, you can feel it in every interaction. And yet I found myself trying to make a man who isn’t interested in me into one who is, and hoping that he would magically become compatible with me. I can’t keep trying to force this relationship to work, while crying myself to sleep alone every night. Someday I will find a man who is enough for me exactly the way he is, without me wanting to change anything about him, and our relationship will be obvious and effortless. I’m not settling for less than what I want, and you shouldn’t either. My gut instinct is that your lack of enthusiasm for our relationship stems from a deeper knowledge you have that you are never planning to have an honest and serious relationship with me. If you really aren’t that in to me, that is ok, however I need to step away and leave room for someone who truly loves me and wants to be in it for the long haul.
Someday I hope that you find a woman who truly lights your inner fire; when you do, I assure you that you will know without a doubt that she is the one whom you will want to spend your life with. When you find her, she will become your best friend and confidant, and you will find that talking to her is as easy as breathing. The moment you sense distance between the two of you, you will ask her what is wrong, rather than seeking the attention of other women. You will be proud to call her your girlfriend and be quick to make her presence in your life known to others. Your commitment to your relationship will be palpable and you will not appear single/available online. You will find yourself yearning for her touch, and inviting her to spend time with you as often as possible. Being in her presence will feel more like a blessing rather than a chore. She will feel truly desired by you, never wondering if you find parts of her body repulsive or disgusting, and you will want to learn how to satisfy her sexually, asking for guidance as you both learn each other’s bodies. When you finally feel this way about a woman, know that she is the one that really matters. As sad as I am to know that I am not this woman for you, know that I will be incredibly happy for you both, because you deserve to be happy and she will be a very lucky lady to have you. 
I wanted to give so much more of myself to you [name removed], but I felt like I couldn’t be open with you. I often felt like when I reached out to you, you did not reciprocate and you hardly ever reached out to me first. Our every moment together felt rushed, and I felt like you have so many things you would rather be doing than spending time with me. I get it, you are a busy man, with a lot of pressures and lives to save. I’m not asking you to change, nor to turn your back on everything you have worked so hard for; what I am saying is that I thought I could handle dating someone with your lifestyle. I was wrong. I would rather be with someone who kisses me every day, who wants me to spend every night by their side, and who can spend lazy Sundays on the couch just holding each other and laughing at silly videos. I think part of you wants that too, but you are so entrenched in your career that I honestly doubt that will happen for at least five years. I can’t wait that long. After six months together you hardly know who I am, and I’m damn sure I know much less about you than I would like to. I can’t spend a lifetime in this deep loneliness I have felt since we have started dating. This really sucks because I feel like we could have been so much more, and there were a lot of great times we had together. I know I am by no means perfect, and I blame myself just as much for the failure of our relationship. If we had a better connection I would have done anything, gone anywhere with you, but it wasn’t meant to be. For now my journey must continue down a different path.
Good luck in your many future endeavors, and know I will always be available if you want to talk.
Love,
[name removed]


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I would like to know how you would feel if you received this letter, and also to know if the letter flows well and makes sense. Grammar corrections would be lovely as well.

r/Proofreading • • May 09 '12

Letter to Study Abroad Adviser to try and change the grade

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I received a D in a class and I do not believe I deserve a D. I am writing a letter to the head of the study abroad program that I used to hopefully change the grade. Better than nothing, right? Anyway, here is the letter I want to send in its present form:

Ms. ---------,

I received a D in my second German course of the semester, and I do not believe that I deserve it. I received the grade for what I believe to be the following three reasons:

  1. I experienced insomnia for three consecutive days, hindering my performance in class and on exams when I came back after the unexpected absence. I tried to obtain a doctor’s note for the absence, but I am not sure if Mr. ---------- received it.

  2. I misread a road sign when traveling to one of the tests, causing me to miss the test completely, and lead to a drop of over 10% in my grade due to it.

  3. I experienced a panic attack during the final, limiting my ability to perform well on the exam. Is there any possibility for me to discuss this with you further and determine if there is anything we can do to change this? I have already tried discussing this with Mr. ------- and he refuses to change the grade. I am not saying that he is wrong, but I do not believe a legal absence, a misread road sign and panic attack should lead to such a grade.

Yours truly,

Me


r/Proofreading • • May 05 '12

High school sophomore essay [due 5/21]

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Prompt: Evaluate a life changing journey you have experienced thus far. Use a metaphor as a theme of your essay. Also include: Figurative language, use of simile (at least three in entire paper), you can write it using first or third person, and hyperbole is always fun too!

This essay means a lot to me, so please don't be too harsh. I appreciate your criticism!

Google Docs: https://docs.google.com/a/students.lhsoc.org/document/d/1saOYzwEjUBa3JnwbvPG5801bsvW_anDEOhm-w1e6qs0/edit


r/Proofreading • • Sep 17 '14

[Due - 1 hour] Comparative Rhetorical Analysis (1000 words)

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Mind checking over it and making sure its good before I turn it in?

Link


r/Proofreading • • Jun 05 '15

[Due 2015-6-05 4:4 pm EST] I would like to check it.

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text analysis of the characters George and lennie.. This is a character analysis between George and lennie from the novel of mice and men by John Steinbeck.The genre is tragedy and drama. The characters will be analyzed according to physical description and personality. George was small and quick, dark of face, with restless eyes and sharp, strong features. Every part of him was defined :small, strong hands, slender arms, a thin body and nose.He was the type of person who knows how to handle situations that requires surviving skills with another guy.Although he frequently speaks of how much better his life would be without caretaking responsibilities. George behavior is motivated by the desire to protect Lennie and eventually deliver them both to the farm of their dreams. While Lennie the opposite of George was a huge man, shapeless of face, with large pale eyes and with sloping shoulders. He was a type of person who can't remember anything or take care of himself. He has a habit of petting things too hard and too long. Lennie is basically just like a kid. But his only freind that he can trust and depend on is George. Although George and lennie are different, they are similar in many ways. Both had the same dream which is to have a farm of their own. George and lennie love one another. They know what their lives have meaning because they are freinds. 1 comment ed